I wrote this assignment about my American trip but the
professor said to me it was not good and gave me c because of some mistakes, so
I’m going to scan the essay here with my professor comments.

The Professor said you talk too much in the essay about what
happened to you and you did not give me what changed in your life. He wants
what changed in my life and how is the trip has growth me, and he said read the
question as well and rewrite the essay. So please I want you read my essay and
rewrite the essay about the same topic, so you can find what changed in my life
and a lot of information for me from my essay.

So please read my essay and understand it and rewrite it in
good grammar and about the question that I put in the first of paper. You can
have all my information from the essay. Please write it in organizing and basic
words.

I scan my essay with my professor comments. So please read
it and read professor comments and understand what should I need, and write it
again in good essay in just 3 or 3 and half pages about the same topic and my
information which in the essay.

I want to be in basic words.

You can know what my professor need in the last from forth
page.

Thanks.

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